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This can be considered my next to final draft depending on reviews. Its not due for a week so I have pleanty of time to work on it.
This is for my English 101 class.
The assignment calls for 500+ word Narrative Essay.
Your reviews, thoughts, opinions, corrections are all welcome. Thank you for your time.
" Cant think of a title at the moment"
They are in the order I would like them to be read
Day 32
I am a god all who in my path is crushed as they scream for justice and vengeance.
Victory tonight was a swift and simple matter. With my abilities all of my enemies movements
would stutter, some would walk into walls in the confusion while others would fire their weapons
wildly into the air hitting nothing all the easier for me to kill them. I successfully captured the enemys
treasure with little effort. I can still hear them screaming and crying pathetic.
Day 14
It has been two weeks since I started fighting, If you could really call it that. Even though I was
never in the same squad twice the mundane jobs were allways the same, either we went after the enemys
supplies , destroy key storage areas or bases, or simply clear and eliminate the enemy in a particular area,
those were the objectives I could never accomplish. I always go in guns blazing only to meet the business end
of a bullet. We no I have never won a battle and defeat has become routine.
Day 20
They continue to mock me in and after battle. So full of themselves it makes me sick. I try so
hard and fail day after day and they never let me forget it. I swear even if I have to sell my soul
I will make these bastards pay!
Day 25
This is a day of days I have discovered a path between this world to heaven and I
crossed it. I have discovered the methods of becoming a god! All will be envious of my new found powers.
Day 30
Those who mocked me before have met a swift death. The ground is littered with their
corpses. I laugh as the poor fools are summoned before me as I empty my bottomless clip into them.
Day 36
My name has become synonymous with death. All the fools fall beneath my boots and die.
Day 45
Lately I have felt a cold stare upon me. Not from the usual trash that I deal with, this felt strange.
Out of the corner of my eyes I thought I saw this solider in black armor staring at me from the distance.
I would always try to kill this man yet never find him when I get close No matter, such things do not concern a god.
Day 50
The solider in black armor continues to follow me. I seem to see him where ever I use my
powers. Does this fool not understand the depth of my abilities? He should not underestimate me.
Day 51
The solider in black is around every corner. And lately he was not alone. In the shadows
more and more of them continue to haunt my steps. I wonder if they are the angels of that domain I intruded upon.
Day 52
They are everywhere now, I cannot step a foot without seeing them. Yet I pretend to not
notice them for the fear of losing everything. I must escape, even If I must risk it all! I MUST!
Day 52.5
They have me. With tears in my eyes I read the words
You have been banned from X-box live. I cried to my mother to let me buy another account.
She sighed and told me Maybe on your 13th birthday I cried myself to sleep thinking I
shouldve played fair, I should not have cheated but its far too late for that now.
-End
This is for my English 101 class.
The assignment calls for 500+ word Narrative Essay.
Your reviews, thoughts, opinions, corrections are all welcome. Thank you for your time.
" Cant think of a title at the moment"
They are in the order I would like them to be read
Day 32
I am a god all who in my path is crushed as they scream for justice and vengeance.
Victory tonight was a swift and simple matter. With my abilities all of my enemies movements
would stutter, some would walk into walls in the confusion while others would fire their weapons
wildly into the air hitting nothing all the easier for me to kill them. I successfully captured the enemys
treasure with little effort. I can still hear them screaming and crying pathetic.
Day 14
It has been two weeks since I started fighting, If you could really call it that. Even though I was
never in the same squad twice the mundane jobs were allways the same, either we went after the enemys
supplies , destroy key storage areas or bases, or simply clear and eliminate the enemy in a particular area,
those were the objectives I could never accomplish. I always go in guns blazing only to meet the business end
of a bullet. We no I have never won a battle and defeat has become routine.
Day 20
They continue to mock me in and after battle. So full of themselves it makes me sick. I try so
hard and fail day after day and they never let me forget it. I swear even if I have to sell my soul
I will make these bastards pay!
Day 25
This is a day of days I have discovered a path between this world to heaven and I
crossed it. I have discovered the methods of becoming a god! All will be envious of my new found powers.
Day 30
Those who mocked me before have met a swift death. The ground is littered with their
corpses. I laugh as the poor fools are summoned before me as I empty my bottomless clip into them.
Day 36
My name has become synonymous with death. All the fools fall beneath my boots and die.
Day 45
Lately I have felt a cold stare upon me. Not from the usual trash that I deal with, this felt strange.
Out of the corner of my eyes I thought I saw this solider in black armor staring at me from the distance.
I would always try to kill this man yet never find him when I get close No matter, such things do not concern a god.
Day 50
The solider in black armor continues to follow me. I seem to see him where ever I use my
powers. Does this fool not understand the depth of my abilities? He should not underestimate me.
Day 51
The solider in black is around every corner. And lately he was not alone. In the shadows
more and more of them continue to haunt my steps. I wonder if they are the angels of that domain I intruded upon.
Day 52
They are everywhere now, I cannot step a foot without seeing them. Yet I pretend to not
notice them for the fear of losing everything. I must escape, even If I must risk it all! I MUST!
Day 52.5
They have me. With tears in my eyes I read the words
You have been banned from X-box live. I cried to my mother to let me buy another account.
She sighed and told me Maybe on your 13th birthday I cried myself to sleep thinking I
shouldve played fair, I should not have cheated but its far too late for that now.
-End
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