Help Pokemon Special Translation Check

[saikyoukamisama]

Hi Guys,

This is my first time translating and i would really appreciate any criticism from my translation. my goal is to maintain a lot of their mannerism and name as they were in the original

please advise if this is not the place to post this kind of thing

Spoiler: pokemon special

 

[saikyoukamisama]

hmm 39 views but no reply. not sure if this is the right forum to ask if not please direct me to the appropriate one