Misc Attempt suggestions on colouring

[Akash]

hello,
i am learning colouring manga. this is my first colouring. can anybody please help me point where i have gone wrong.

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[manfregara]

OMG!
This is your first attempt?!?!?!?! It's wonderful!!!!

 

[Airianna]

A first attempt! Brilliant job.
The clouds look a bit bumpy. But I think its fine.

Maybe add the highlights to the black haired girl and experience with textures for the clothing.

I look forward to seeing more coloring from you!

 

[Akash]

thank you guys,

i know i messed up the sky.

here is my next attempt. i have tried to give texture to cloth but didnt get what i expected

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[Magikabullet]

very nice job!

really the second one great...
I think you can even see an improvement

 

[LadyHyacia]

Whoa... amazing.
I've made over 10 recolorings,
but it's still not as good as yours.
The eyes look a little... bizarre (just a tiny bit)
and the clouds' outlines look a little blurry.